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Sad-eyed and Blondie by ~LetsHaveAFiesta:iconLetsHaveAFiesta:



    Her tawny bangs hung over her face, obstructing the view of her sad
eyes.  She wasn’t ugly and she wasn’t fat.  She was just small and
innocent and maybe a few social classes down from the thin girl with
short blond hair whose icy words, “You’re out,” rang throughout the
air.  The world seemed to close upon us as the blonde girl pointed to
the end of the line of people waiting to play.  The sad-eyed girl’s
only crime had been to join a game of nine square and yet no one
protested or stood up to say she was wrong, not even me.  We all knew
what was going on, yet we watched Sad-Eyes get struck down time and
time again and we watched her face grow more dismal with each powerful
glare from Blondie.
    As another ball whizzed angrily by Sad-eyes, the seven girls who
filled the remaining squares rustled nervously.  I looked around and
saw amusement, fear, and defiance flashing through the crowd of faces
that encircled me.  I sucked the end of my thumb absently as I turned
back to the game, briefly closing my eyes to pray that the horrific
scene in front of me, would turn into a soap opera on the television
that I could turn off and walk away from.  It didn't.  As my fantasy
slowly warped back into reality I realized I was there; in the middle
of this awful world where blonde girls threw red plastic spheres at
kids who weren’t “worthy” of a chance.
    I wish I could say that I stood up to Blondie that day.  That the
angry red monster that had been growing inside of me, had burst out of
my chest and chewed up all the injustice that had occurred in those
nine little squares, but sometimes the only thing we can do, is stand
and watch, even if it’s not right.  Sometimes we cannot focus on what
we could’ve done or should’ve done, but what we will do and after that
day I promised myself that next time, I will stand up for what is,
should be, and will always be right.  I will burn the flag of
discrimination and wave it proudly above my head.  Then maybe, just
maybe, I will have changed the world.
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This is an actual thing that happened to me (or around me) ... so sad.

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~arrowphotography:iconarrowphotography: Feb 28, 2008, 10:24:52 AM
Powerful... wow.. You are so talented..

Please comment my poem? [link]
~adulous:iconadulous: Feb 28, 2008, 11:19:40 AM
"I will burn the flag of discrimination and wave it proudly above my head."

Lawl, nice one.

The descriptions are good, graphic but not excessively. The style, progression, wording, structure, etc, etc is fine. It isn't spectacular, but I have seen far worse. The story itself, though well-worn, is relatable. Overall, I'd say it's a fairly good job.
~NarutoAddict765:iconNarutoAddict765: Feb 28, 2008, 4:40:15 PM
With who?

btw it's Lyndsey.

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:heart: "Maybe i'll try getting caught." :heart:
-Yoh (High School Debut)
~myjarofdirt:iconmyjarofdirt: Feb 28, 2008, 4:50:50 PM
This is seriously one of the best things I have read by someone our age (and many years older). This is awesome. But when did this happen?

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You need to be broken because pain is the only thing that is certain.
~LetsHaveAFiesta:iconLetsHaveAFiesta: Mar 3, 2008, 9:00:58 PM
In 7th grade... It was the first time I felt completely hopeless-- like I had no control of what was going on. But the sad part is that I did. Anyways, thanks. I like this one, but not as much as you give me credit for. :D Hopefully it might win that writing contest thing. THat would be so cool!!! I've never one before... Personally I think you're poem will win. It was too good not to. And jaz's story will and erica's narrative... or torrans... they were both good.
~myjarofdirt:iconmyjarofdirt: Mar 3, 2008, 9:13:48 PM
I hope mine does, but...you never know. Yours will!!!

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You need to be broken because pain is the only thing that is certain.
~LetsHaveAFiesta:iconLetsHaveAFiesta: Mar 3, 2008, 9:20:37 PM
What do you mean? and I know :D ... Hi haha